Escape
Everyday I wish for life to end
I'm Scared of the hurt people cause me
I Cry frequently in hope it will wash away the day
But All it does though is make things worse
The Pain will come no matter what
There is no Escape
Short, exagerated, but creative.
I'm Scared of the hurt people cause me
I Cry frequently in hope it will wash away the day
But All it does though is make things worse
The Pain will come no matter what
There is no Escape
Short, exagerated, but creative.
posted by Em at 3:36 PM
5 Comments:
I like this poem except that you used 'escape' in the poem.
I thought it made since for the word 'escape' to be in it. But I see where your coming from.
I like the concept, I've been wanting to write a poem with the same kind of concept. Spelling a word out and such, but I always fell short and the poem sucked.
But I do see your side with the adding escape thing. However (this is just how I'd do it) I'd have 'escape' as the last word of the poem:
"..all is dark and eternal. escape."
Something like that. I guess.
Lol not to sound arguemenative (sp?), but escape is the last word of the poem. I assume you mean escape should be a setence of its own.
About your own poetry though, let me tell you; you are your own worst critic. Half the poems on here that I've written I don't think are that great but I put them up any ways just to hear what others say. So don't be so critical, it's poetry.
Yes. The Last sentence. It's very dramatic.
Ah, I know that to well. However I have a lot on my plate this weekend. And I'm not really emotionally charged. Just burnt out. I don't want to write a poem about high school. That's lame.
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