Loneliness
Loneliness is a dark rain cloud
That follows above you
That sounds like the foot steps
Of everyone walking away from you
With depressing smell of
dying flowers
And makes you fell like a falling
Glass that no one cares to catch
I wrote this poem in 8th grade for an English project. The assignment was to writing a sence poem, choose a feeling and tell what you think it would look, smell, feel, ect like. I obviously chose loneliness. This is because 8th grade was a time where I felt lonely a lot. I chose to include this poem in my book because I feel like it connects well with my life.
That follows above you
That sounds like the foot steps
Of everyone walking away from you
With depressing smell of
dying flowers
And makes you fell like a falling
Glass that no one cares to catch
I wrote this poem in 8th grade for an English project. The assignment was to writing a sence poem, choose a feeling and tell what you think it would look, smell, feel, ect like. I obviously chose loneliness. This is because 8th grade was a time where I felt lonely a lot. I chose to include this poem in my book because I feel like it connects well with my life.
posted by Em at 5:50 PM
2 Comments:
Wow. That one kind of hit me over the head. Maybe it's just because it's me, but I think that poem is awesome. I don't know if I would describe it as the 'best', but it's definately the one that I like the most out of these so far.
I'll be hard pressed to pick favorite lines in this one, because it is very short, and I like them all, but I'll give it a shot.
"That sounds like the foot steps
Of everyone walking away from you"
I'm guessing that the reason that I like this line (and this poem) so much is that it's kind of close to my own life. This line basically embodies the essence of the poem.
Really, I think you probably struck a very common note with this one. I'm guessing that very many people can relate to this.
Wonderful job.
Thank you again Patrick. Honestly I've always loved this poem, though I think I've written better. I'm not so sure what it is besides the fact that it's another one of the few poems I written where nothing is exagerated. I'm flattered that you like it so much, I was somewhat expecting an *ehh, so so* from you.
So far I think in everyone of my poems you have picked the same favorite line as me. This one though I think I kinda like the first line:
"Loneliness is a dark rain cloud
That follows above you"
Most the time my favorite line is either the first or last.
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